Rough Cut

Feed Back

Editing:
Positive - Liked they was it flashed around and kept it uneven.
- Good use of editing. We liked the "record" in the top left on the establishing
shot.
Negative - Flashes could be faster, rapid and more intense.
- Would benefit from more variety of shots.
- Shorten clips e.g. when the character is waiting to have leaves put on her.

Camera work:
Positive - The video camera shots are very effective.
- Great beginning, video camera looks really good and helps create atmosphere.
- Good emotion when she is captured.
- Great range of shots.
Negative - It could be really effective if u changed the tone of it e.g. Sepia or
Black and White
- Try to keep people out of the shots.
- maybe there should be more close ups to add to variety

Sound :
Positive - Like the screech sound.
- Screeching helps make it clearer as to whats happening.
- Sound is good.
- Nice and freaky.
Negative - sound in "in flashes" need to be screechier and loud.
-Could vary the sound a little more.

Mise en scene:
Positive - Very playful and innocent - childhood memories. Relates to thriller convention of making a safe place unsafe.
- Bright, colorful and contrasting.
- Love her dress.
- Good setting because it starts happy but is easy to imagine it turning more morbid.
Negative - It could be in Black and White?
-Maybe you could add a crackling effect or distort the footage.

Narrative:
Positive - Sense of innocence and lots of it is established nicely.
- Its great.
- Pretty easy to follow. Quite simple, but very effective.
Negative - Ending is Unsure.... what is going on, where do the titles go?

Credit list

A Bhambees production presents

A Goodfellow film

Ofelia Marcs

Adam Galbraith

Harry Hotchkiss

Costume Design by Bryony Phillipe

Art direction by Tom Rupert

Production design by Jacques Rory

Casting by Carla St John

Film Editing by Justin Bavalia

Cinematography by Jude McGrellis

Original music by Christian Morrow

Produced by Elijah Fenn

Directed by Peter Goodfellow

( Red text = credits being used)

Shot List

1. Mid shot / low angle - spinning, having fun.

2. Close up - extreme close up of eye.

3. Mid shot - leaves being thrown in the air.

4. Close up - leaves being thrown in the air.

5. Close up - head turning around, looking at the camera.

6. Mid shot - hiding behind a tree (happy).

7. Close up - girl facing camera, mans hand placed over her mouth.

8. Close up - girl lying on floor, camera facing above her.

9. Extreme close up - mans hand on girls arm.

10. Mid shot - girl walking along from left to right.

11. Close up - man's, "killer's" eyes.

12. Mid/ long shot - walking around the woods.

Animatic