Feed Back

Editing:
Positive - Liked they was it flashed around and kept it uneven.
- Good use of editing. We liked the "record" in the top left on the establishing
shot.
Negative - Flashes could be faster, rapid and more intense.
- Would benefit from more variety of shots.
- Shorten clips e.g. when the character is waiting to have leaves put on her.

Camera work:
Positive - The video camera shots are very effective.
- Great beginning, video camera looks really good and helps create atmosphere.
- Good emotion when she is captured.
- Great range of shots.
Negative - It could be really effective if u changed the tone of it e.g. Sepia or
Black and White
- Try to keep people out of the shots.
- maybe there should be more close ups to add to variety

Sound :
Positive - Like the screech sound.
- Screeching helps make it clearer as to whats happening.
- Sound is good.
- Nice and freaky.
Negative - sound in "in flashes" need to be screechier and loud.
-Could vary the sound a little more.

Mise en scene:
Positive - Very playful and innocent - childhood memories. Relates to thriller convention of making a safe place unsafe.
- Bright, colorful and contrasting.
- Love her dress.
- Good setting because it starts happy but is easy to imagine it turning more morbid.
Negative - It could be in Black and White?
-Maybe you could add a crackling effect or distort the footage.

Narrative:
Positive - Sense of innocence and lots of it is established nicely.
- Its great.
- Pretty easy to follow. Quite simple, but very effective.
Negative - Ending is Unsure.... what is going on, where do the titles go?